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I like this a lot, it has a poetic quality to it!
Thank you, Supergirl! I had hoped to keep the style of the first few pages going throughout trying to say more with less but...I;m glad you like it!Peace,Love&Kisses!!!
I've read this strip several times since it was published, and I still struggle to understand it. I would not even be sure where to begin a discussion just on the story line itself. There is a coherent story in there, right? Just somewhat obscured by unusual narrative techniques? And maybe something else?It says a lot that I've read it several times. That almost never happens.
Wow! Thank you, Zag Zygg! I'll start by taking your re-reading this tale as a compliment, (regardless of you mentioning that the story/style seem rather disjointed... I do, sincerely appreciate all comments & critiques).My apologies if this experiment with concept & composition leaves something to be desired... other than that Slip-N-Zip thingy, and such a lovely form to use it on. I suppose that four years ago I was merely trying out some different writing style and got too deep into the concept of a division between both of their consciousnesses being aware of themselves and what was happening but not having direct, subconscious connection with each-other.As for the clipped, descriptive sentences; I was aiming for the main, black text to be mostly a play-by-play scroll of the guy's thoughts as he tried-out his new cos-ray and her body.(one aspect of my recent silence, I suppose, is the feeling that my stories have become nothing but rehashing the same thing ad-infinitum & ad-nauseum. so, perhaps I should look back at some earlier pieces to find grounds for new & different things going forward?)I hope that helps to clear some things up for you, sweetie. And, to be honest, I had to go back and read it again to recall what I wrote. Thank you for your comment & visits, Zag Zygg!Peace,Lust&Kinkiness!!!Elle